don't jump from one place to an other . like Avril and Deryck are watching a movie, then all of the sudden they are back at home. Tell how they got back home, what happened in the car
don't make a love update ''made'' like don't think to hard about the words, it's not that you need to make the perfect words to write an update. Just use what ever comes up to you. What you feel like you should write, just write that. Don't sit down and be like oh-how-to-write-the-best-love-update-that-makes-people-go-''awww'' thats just wrong, thats WAY WRONG. You haveto write what you feel, not what you think people will like, of course you can add somethings the readers will like. But its your story, so its all up to you what to write. The words need to come out while you type. Not by thinking 10 min about how to make people go ''aww'''because the updates that comes out of nothing are mostley the best
oh and of course use ''.........'' and what you have on your keyboard
like:
''Avril. Did you had a good meal?''
I smiled, of course I didn't have a good meal. I had a great meal.
''Yes, it was pretty good.''
But I didn't want to look all wierd so I just tried to remain calm.
not
Avril did you had a good meal I smiled of course I didn't had a good meal I had a great meal yes it was pretty good But I didn't want to look all wierd so I just reamin calm
people will be like
and don't understand it
and last one (for now
) there are more people on the earth dan Avril, Deryck and Evan
don't make every story the same by letting them fall in love break up fall in love, Evan whant to kill Deryck, Deryck kills Evan
I have read a ton of those storys but there is more in the world then just ''love'' sure you can add love or put it as main thing. But let there also be a problem, or something that has nothing to do with love but is important happening in the story