Chad's Poetry Thread

[O Captain My Captain]

I REMEMER YOU! You probably have no idea who i am, but i do remember you.

[Pink_Motorola]

Originally Posted by Chad

A Sonic poem, eh? Ask and ye shall receive:

Never Look Back

So this is a new day
Time for another beginning
The blazing blur I make
Leaves all the posts and signs spinning

So this is a new act
Another challenge left behind
There's no better feeling
Than that of the breeze through my spines

The clanking of metal
As it crumbles effortlessly
Gives new sense of freedom
To continue resiliently

So here I go across the hills, lakes, and ruins
Searching for those hidden magic gems along the way
There's no obstacle too tough for me to speed past
I'll take these detractors and blow them away

I wish he who was evil knew better by now
I'll stop his brilliant plans and throw them off track
I don't mean to show off, but it's just that easy
No matter what happens, I will never look back

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Not bad for just coming up with it in ten minutes, eh?

I <3 U.
so much.
sonic rules.
Respect, chad[Wick]

[Chad]

This one's gone through countless edits since the rough draft ten days ago. I've finally decided to settle for this as the final product:

Firefly

By the way you glow
So bright I can barely see my path, but that's fine
If you shine your eyes
This way you'll see where I'm trying to go just this time

"Sorry, I can't help but stare
It's just that
You're everything I think I need"

Blinded now
I tripped over my own feet and stumbled breathless to the ground
Looking up
My last ray of hope was fading as you walked past without a sound

Your fluorescent light
Only serves to tease my mind and shatter my heart
Looking at the way
You present your lovely self, like a work of art

"Sorry, I don't have the time
Or patience
To talk or be in love right now"

Now tonight
As you exit I'm left with a trail of darkness, feeling so tense
There's no beam
No starry twinkle to guide me, everything ceased to make sense

I know that it's no more than a long shot
But I pray with each shred of hope I've got
You'll shine on me someday...

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EDIT: Okay, I changed a few things around, and I swear this is the LAST and FINAL edit of this poem. (For now...)

[Pink_Motorola]

that's amazing!
you're a very talented writer

[Chad]

Yeah, inspiration comes easy if you look in the right places.

[scenedrug]

I really admire youre writing. (Even though I have no idea who you are / were)

[Chad]

Not to leave this thread for dead, here's something new I'm working on.

Summer Rain (rough draft)

Traveling afar
It's not that I want to
But the humid air
Pushes me back one more step
Knocking me off course

The moon shows a path
Down a lone rocky stream
My instincts tell me
Not to follow, but I can't stop my feet
I never thought days would pass
When translucent rays could deceive
Home doesn't seem so far away
So why do I still feel so lost?

If I could find
That one golden key
To unlock the safe route I'd be fine
I am waiting
In summer rain for the sun to come up
But will it be soon enough?

The wind turns to point
Leafy green fingers here
Rustling as I pass
Under the sea of dark blue
Inspiring forfeiture

The deep midnight voices
Singing in monotone
Infect this river
Drops of sweet sorrow form on my skin
I never thought nights would pass
When stinging heat could overcome me
Morning doesn't seem far away
So why am I still so tired?

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As this is only a rough draft, a few parts will undergo some major changes before the final edit. Expect this to really shape up over the next several days.

[Chad]

Summer Rain (07/24 edit)

Traveling afar
It's not that I want to
But the damp night air
Pushes me back one more step
Blurring this dark course

The moon lights a path
Down a lone rocky stream
I embark, but stall
It's too risky and unsure to go on
I never thought days would pass
When translucent rays could deceive
Casting fuzzy shadows along
Confusing my only way home

The wind turns to point
Leafy green fingers my way
Speaking lullabies
For places I'd rather be
Inspiring forfeiture

The deep midnight voices
Singing in monotone
Infect this river
Drops of sweet sorrow form on my skin
I never thought evenings would pass
When humid drizzle could feel dry
Forcing a blinding submission
Delaying the start of morning

If I could find
That one magic key
To unlock the safe route I'd be fine
I am waiting
In summer rain for the sun to come up
But will it be soon enough?

[Hunter]

^ great job!

[Chad]

Okay, I've been slacking lately, so it's time to revive this shit.

This poem comes from a dream I had a few weeks ago. This one underwent a major change in direction from the rough draft to the final, though. I originally wanted to tackle a darker, more serious issue but it just wasn't going as I had hoped. About the only thing I didn't change was the title.

Oh, and please don't ask me who Christina is. Just some random female name that popped into my head.

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Dance, Dance Miss Christina

If I could reach your orchard
I'd sit and gaze as your young fruits start to prosper
Until they blossom so full
They're ripening to my favorite shade of brilliance

A breath of wind fills the air
Swaying your branches in slow and flawless patterns
And like a union of souls
Your leaves move in a slightly delayed formation

The radiant colors you sport
Gingerly shaking in perfect time together
With every breeze that follows
Another dance to the cool, natural tempo

When melody strikes the air this moonlit evening
You'll move gracefully, cheerily with the rhythm
Your limbs swinging in a smooth hypnotic movement
Spending the nights in an uninterrupted bliss

If I could reach your orchard
I'd watch the misty dew condense on your young fruits
And when the morning arrives
Maybe they'll be ripe enough for me to pick them

[Chad]

New poem.

Smoke Trail

O weary night
I've waited for you so
Frozen in this
Stale existence
With little sentience

O static moon
I wish to cling to you
And never be
Soaked by sunlight again
It scorches me
And drowns my sleepy eyes out

Somewhere in the distance
Burns a fire just for me
To comfort me and melt
My apparitions away

O starry sky
I've wished upon you so
For undreamt dreams
And memories
Of all that's past me

O midnight air
Provide me with my strength
To carry on
Within these dimensions
Of things so new
It feels I've lost all I had

Guide me, o smoky trail
To the zone of pleasant warmth
My heart will beat again
When I've found my new refuge

[Hunter]

^ Thats really good!!!!