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08-17-2007, 10:30 PM
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My poetry!
Nothing
How can someone not be someone,
When you think you know them,
To find out, they don’t really care
And now sitting as I am I find nothing,
No one that I can confide,
No I Cannot hide,
Anymore
I need the peace, my something,
But I have, I have nothing,
And how I feel inside
Is like a blunt fire in my lung
Now knowing you don’t really care
I die a little more inside,
A little more of me is caught
In that continuous vortex of nothing
Lost
Frustrating is not a word,
It does not describe the world.
Confusion, then dark,
Nothing but then something.
I am lost but am not scared,
I will find my way.
Twisting Darkness
Where do I stand,
My life is musk,
Dirt, it is unplanned,
I see nothing there,
Lonely I stand,
As I watch my shadow rot.
Unplanned,
Lost in my own doubt,
So dark, It is hollow.
I do not know,
It digs deeper each day,
I am in twisting darkness.
Betrayal
Betrayal,
Caring then hating,
Betrayal,
Loving then cremating
Stab, stab, stab, my back can feel the pain,
Pull, pull, pull, permanent, the blood will stain,
Forever a scar remains.
No More Hiding
So confusing, I felt lost.
My pessimistic mind brought me to dark places,
But as I arrived, my spirit deepened,
My opinion changed.
The thrill, a first time,
Fresh, exciting,
Darkness disappeared,
And for those few moments I was me.
No more hiding, I realise that now.

 
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08-17-2007, 10:40 PM
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They are all really good but I cant pick my favorit because of that reason. Good job and keep up the good work.
Have fun and keep rockin,
streetrod
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08-17-2007, 11:50 PM
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your good with yoru words id definitely build on it if i were you 
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08-18-2007, 11:48 AM
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I can relate to one of the poems above, actually. The lines are easily imagined in my mind.
Great writings.
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08-18-2007, 11:49 AM
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Thanks. 
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08-18-2007, 11:51 AM
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Nice lewis
I'd never dare showing anyone my poetry 
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08-18-2007, 11:54 AM
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As you know im not shy 
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08-18-2007, 02:04 PM
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Love them. 
"The blood will stain
Forever a scar remains". Awesome.
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08-18-2007, 02:07 PM
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My official Poetry site.
^^^ It is a bebo based site on poetry, i have like 7 reviews, all 5 and 4 stars. Visit why not?
And thanks everyone 
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08-18-2007, 07:37 PM
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