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12-30-2007, 06:35 PM
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hahahah 
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12-30-2007, 06:36 PM
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Thanks BTW I think I did good as I wrote it within 15 minutes 
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12-30-2007, 06:37 PM
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hahah well you can vote for me if ya want 
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12-30-2007, 06:38 PM
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wtf? I think I'm going to puke.

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12-30-2007, 06:43 PM
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hahahha awesome lewy 
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12-30-2007, 06:47 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Beautiful Tragedy
Ok so to give you some commentary for your first story, I felt that the way you managed to sqeeze avril in there without having her be a part of it was great  and the way you made unwanted fit into the story was amazing  I also liked it because it was a breathe of fresh air and i was able to read through it without feeling like it was predictable in any way
Good job! you should consider doing more!
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I totally agree! Its very unique! I liked how you switched it up a bit and wrote it from the dogs point of view instead of a person. You did a damn good job writing being your first story. I hope to see more of it in the future!  * wink wink* 
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thank you laila the truth is hiding in your eyes and its hanging on your tongue, just boiling in my blood, but you think i can't see, what kind man that you..
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12-30-2007, 06:49 PM
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Why do you wana puke JC? 
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12-30-2007, 06:52 PM
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