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01-13-2008, 10:31 AM
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Long time coming
Okay, It took a while til I came up with ideas for a story but I think this is really good and I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I do and comment a lot...
 Well, here it goes: I was walking along a beautiful and peaceful road. On the horizon I saw the rising sun. Summer had just begun and it was one of those days that felt just perfect. I stopped for a while and closed my eyes to let the sunbeams warm my face and I breathed in the air that smelled like it always does after it has rained a lot. All of a sudden I felt an ice cold hand on my shoulder. In shock I turned around but couldnīt see the face of the person this hand belonged to as the sun was blinding me. I could neither move nor was I able to say one single word, my whole body felt like paralyzed. With a creepy voice the guy told me he wouldnīt do me any harm but I didnīt really believe him. Without having any chance to escape he grabbed my arm and dragged me into his car that wasnīt parked too far away and ordered me to close my eyes. He was always talking about a surprise he had planned for me while I was feeling more and more anxious from minute to minute. I didnīt know what he had in mind or where he would take me. All I was thinking about was that I had to get out of that car and as if he was reading my mind the stranger told me, this time with an even creepier voice: "youīre not gonna get out of this anymore! No way!" What if he wanted to kill me? Afer we had been driving for a while we reched a huge and very high bridge. Shocked I realized that the guy started to speed up the car. Hysterically I started screaming: "Stop it! Stop the car!" Without showing any emotions he looked at me ( I still didnīt recognize him although I could see his face, especially his eyes that were full of anger and fear at the same time.) saying in an indifferent tone: "Didnīt you know where this was gonna lead you?" "How the hell should I have known that?" I thought but didnīt reply. Suddenly I felt the car side - slipping and before it overturned a few times and fell down the bridge the unknown guy managed to get out of the car that was now about to hit the ground...
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My FAN FICS: http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...me-coming.html http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...k-silence.html  this awesome blend was made by my girl Suzee - you rock This innocence is brilliant I hope that it will stay This moment is perfect Please don`t go away I donīt want this moment To ever end Where everthing`s nothing Without you I`d wait here forever Just to see you smile Cause it`s true I am nothing without you Av and Deryck forever Whateverīs meant to be will work out perfectly |
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01-13-2008, 12:07 PM
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thanks, I will! I also love your stories, I have to admit Iīm addicted to them....
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Suzee, Rock Steady and Nobody`s Fool are my very cool Sistas... Rock on
My FAN FICS: http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...me-coming.html http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...k-silence.html this awesome blend was made by my girl Suzee - you rock This innocence is brilliant I hope that it will stay This moment is perfect Please don`t go away I donīt want this moment To ever end Where everthing`s nothing Without you I`d wait here forever Just to see you smile Cause it`s true I am nothing without you Av and Deryck forever Whateverīs meant to be will work out perfectly |
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01-13-2008, 12:08 PM
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Its good, I like it, even though that poetic descriptions piss me off but still I liked it, you got yourself a reader
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01-13-2008, 12:13 PM
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 thanx, I will consider that in my next updates, you know Iīm not a pro writer but Iīm always willing to improve!
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Suzee, Rock Steady and Nobody`s Fool are my very cool Sistas... Rock on
My FAN FICS: http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...me-coming.html http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...k-silence.html this awesome blend was made by my girl Suzee - you rock This innocence is brilliant I hope that it will stay This moment is perfect Please don`t go away I donīt want this moment To ever end Where everthing`s nothing Without you I`d wait here forever Just to see you smile Cause it`s true I am nothing without you Av and Deryck forever Whateverīs meant to be will work out perfectly |
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01-13-2008, 12:17 PM
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Of course I know that, and you know practise makes you better
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01-13-2008, 01:20 PM
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if you want another update I want a lot of comments...
 if I have at least 3 more comments Iīll post another update by tomorrow!
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Suzee, Rock Steady and Nobody`s Fool are my very cool Sistas... Rock on
My FAN FICS: http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...me-coming.html http://www.avrilbandaids.com/forums/...k-silence.html this awesome blend was made by my girl Suzee - you rock This innocence is brilliant I hope that it will stay This moment is perfect Please don`t go away I donīt want this moment To ever end Where everthing`s nothing Without you I`d wait here forever Just to see you smile Cause it`s true I am nothing without you Av and Deryck forever Whateverīs meant to be will work out perfectly |
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01-13-2008, 06:22 PM
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I dunno how many, but I'm up here as well! Good story, go on!
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