the surprise?!

[bunny]

I am gonna make my own story, I hope you guys like it If you don't please tell me.
Sorry for my bad English as you may or may not know I'm from Holland and have Dyslexia so if I write things wrong please don't get all mad at me
First I will just start to write and later I will tell you from a few peopel in the story how they are
(this is NOT an Avril and deryck is getting a baby story )

I couldn''t believe it. Where is she? I have looked every where, called evan, Butch, all her friends but knowbody knows where Avril is. I was freaking out she has gone for two days now. she didn't told me where she went and doesn't pick up her phone. She always tells me where she goes. ''Shall I call her mom?'' I asked Steve. ''No Deryck maby she is njust staying over at a friend.'' ''Well if so she has a problem! I have called her 1000 times and if she is making fun of me I........'' I just lost myself, I just can't live without her. She means the world to me, I would die for her. I started to cry. ''Why doesn't she tell me where she is?'' ''I don't know did you had a fight with her?'' ''No, how can I have a fight with the sweetest woman on this planet? Steve we have to find her. what if there is something wsrong with her?''

[Liqaa']

Good job.
Keep going.

[Nimbus Pixie]

I like it! Update soon!!

[In The Rhymes]

I like it,please update.

Only ask of one thing though, I like has you use " " those,its good,a lot of people forget to use them[trust me,read a lot tht way].
the only problem is, could you space it out.
For example, something like this;

''Shall I call her mom?'' I asked Steve.
''No Deryck maby she is njust staying over at a friend.''

Rather than the original;
''Shall I call her mom?'' I asked Steve. ''No Deryck maby she is njust staying over at a friend.''

It's just easier for me to read lol.
But i like the consept so far,hope to see more soon

[bunny]

wow I never thought peopel liked it oke I think I will have to read again, update tonight

[bunny]

Steve just left. We have called all the hospital, but there was no Avril. On a moment I thought about what Avril did the day before she left.
I can't really remember but it was wierd.
After two beers I remembered it. She asked if I knew where her passport was. This made me think.
I called Steve again.
''She isn't missing ..........''
''How do you mean?''
''Well she took her passport. I think she left me.''
For 10 seconds nothing.
''What!!?? Deryck that is bullshit. She loves you more than anything in this world, how in the world can she left you?''
''I don't know she was doing wierd the last two weeks, maby she has someone els.''
Whe I said that my hart broke, did she had someone els?
''Deryck get this out of your head. She didn't left you.''


The next day I called Avril her mom. It was the wierdest phone call I have ever had. She wasn't shocked, or afraid that Avril was hurt or missing. All she said was.
''Don't worry she can take care of herself, don't believe she left you. She is in good......''
and there she stopped talking, like she was suprised by her words, I didn't get it.

[sk8er_boi06]

good job.go on ....

[Nimbus Pixie]

go on please!

[Dr.Pepper199]

cool,cool

[pigster]

i like it

[bunny]

Oke I will now tell you about some peopel in this story
Jack- 25 years old, Avril her brother, very strong, works in the Congo
Matt- 22 years old, Avril her twin brother, very strong and also works in the Cong
Chuck- 40 years old (well that kind of age) is a very good friend with Avril and her brothers, also works at the Congo

''I don't know Steve, there is something I don't know about. I will call Matt and Jack. They will know whats wrong.''
It took me a long day, to think about what I wanted to say and ask them.
They are big guys, working for the U.N. in the Congo. They have saved my life toghter with 40 other peopel when I was in the Congo for War Child Canada. They had alot of help from there good friend Chuck. Avril has been very often to the Congo, like 30 times? I don't know. Before she has lived there for like a year to help peopel. I still don't really understand how they can go to the Congo, there are all kinds of wars going on there. I was always scared if Avril told me she went to the Congo.
I picked up the phone and dailed the number of Jack.
''Matt Lavigne.''
''Hey Matt, how are you?''
Hey, Deryck, fine thanks and you?'
''Not very great. Avril is missing, do you know where she is?''
''Well don't worry about her.''
''How do you mean?''
''Deryck I have to go now, there is something going on, I have to do some stuff.............''

[bunny]

I forgot to say that Matt and Jack are in the Congo on the time of the phone call